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goinUP
11-25-2007, 5:48pm
An old man in a tainted house;
He never learned what life's about.
The crowd left him alone,
No one ever came to install that phone.

His last event was a massive one,
He thought maybe he'd have some fun.
Went to a high school and shot it up -
They looked like the kids that deserve this stuff.
A girl cried, a boy screamed,
And of this sweet revenge, he'd always dreamed.

The police came and evacuated,
The man went to his house and waited,
But no one came to get him, for they were afraid.

Everyone knew who it was,
They knew he had a decade-old because.
No one offered him a chance to live,
No one had any love to give.

Maybe some time outside would help,
A picture or two on the dusty shelf.
Or maybe he was lost beyond hope...
But no one ever came to install that phone
Instead, they left him all alone.

He died quietly, not a peep.
He was a soul no one wanted to keep.
He was not to be found until the stench reeked,
And still, the town refused to turn the key.

Troll
11-25-2007, 7:36pm
Great poem

dreamer
11-25-2007, 9:36pm
:shocked: that is one of the best poems I have EVER read

goinUP
11-25-2007, 10:19pm
Great poem

Thanks Andrew. :)

:shocked: that is one of the best poems I have EVER read

Thanks.....:huh: I'm not sure I think it's that great....:uhh: but thanks anyway. :)

dreamer
11-25-2007, 10:39pm
Shut up it is

period!
:p

goinUP
11-25-2007, 10:44pm
Shut up it is

period!
:p

LOL! If you say so....:p

dreamer
11-25-2007, 10:52pm
didn't I?

.......I did

it really made me sad and I never really get emotional even with my own writing in fact I hate most of it and delete it so this was realllllllllly good!

goinUP
11-25-2007, 11:08pm
didn't I?

.......I did

it really made me sad and I never really get emotional even with my own writing in fact I hate most of it and delete it so this was realllllllllly good!

Aww....as Shania says, my main goal in writing is to connect with someone...knowing that I did that is the best compliment of all! :love: Thanks so much, Misty. :hugs:

orchestragirl
11-26-2007, 6:45pm
Wow, that was really good. You did it again - you're a great writer!

SevenUp!
11-26-2007, 6:57pm
Wow, that was really good. You did it again - you're a great writer!

When you're right, you're right! :up:

goinUP
11-26-2007, 7:00pm
Thanks so much you two. :love:

SevenUp!
11-26-2007, 7:16pm
Thanks so much you two. :love:

Well deserved. :love:

StarryShania
11-27-2007, 8:53pm
That was a really well written poem Jenna.

goinUP
11-27-2007, 8:57pm
Thanks so much, Alicia. :hugs:

dreamer
11-28-2007, 11:00pm
:hugs: