A Poem

[Logan]

Shattered Dreams- by Raul Takacs
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I'm sitting here,
In the darkest of places,
Torn with feelings of pain and despair.

It seems like an endless abyss sets us apart,
and no matter how much my soul desires,
That gap can never be passed.

Rivers of emotions are raging inside me,
tearing my heart into a thousand bits,
Leaving it a lifeless stomp.

Shattered dreams,
like a broken glass,
can never be reunited.

And as the rain pours on my face,
unites with my bloody tears,
I realize, I know,
Dreams are made to be broken.

Shattered dreams,
like a broken glass,
can never be reunited.

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Sorry it ain't a masterpiece, and that I can't rhyme or anything, but that's just how I'm feeling at the moment.

-Vega-

[Annette]

It's good but very sad it almost made me cry:cry:

[benperkins]

Not bad Raul :) I look foward to reading more of your work :)

Ben

[Logan]

Thanks Ben.
There's isn't much to show though.

I was just in the proper mood last nigh...

-Vega-

[SHANIANUTS!]

Originally posted by Vega
Shattered Dreams- by Raul Takacs
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I'm sitting here,
In the darkest of places,
Torn with feelings of pain and despair.

It seems like an endless abyss sets us apart,
and no matter how much my soul desires,
That gap can never be passed.

Rivers of emotions are raging inside me,
tearing my heart into a thousand bits,
Leaving it a lifeless stump.

Shattered dreams,
like a broken glass,
can never be reunited.

And as the rain pours on my face,
unites with my bloody tears,
I realize, I know,
Dreams are made to be broken.

Shattered dreams,
like a broken glass,
can never be reunited.

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Sorry it ain't a masterpiece, and that I can't rhyme or anything, but that's just how I'm feeling at the moment.

-Vega- I thought I was reading one of Zen's works ~ wow ~ I didn't know you were a poet too!!!

[Logan]

Thanks Bob, but you must not compare this to Ben's work. The guy has got talent!

-Vega-

[benperkins]

:o

Ben

[Logan]

Originally posted by benperkins
:o

Ben

Don't be modest, Ben!
You know you are talented!

-Vega-

[Mutt-]

Oh, cheer up, Vega. Like Shania says, "Sometimes dreams come true." You never know what may happen in this life. Hey, you're that little dark haired guy from Twain City, isn't that right???

[Logan]

Hey, I'm much better now, thanks.
Scared for life? Maybe. But I'm just more realistic, even pessimistic, if you'd wish to call it that.

And hey, I sure ain't a "little dark haired guy" :)

-Vega-

[egon_from_sweden]

Very good poem, Vega! I liked it! And it does not have to rhyme - to me, it is always what is said, that is the important thing. This is Your feelings and that can never be wrong. What is a masterpiece? I think this is one because it is from your heart. Take care! :)

[Logan]

Thanks for your kind words, Egon :)

-Vega-

[egon_from_sweden]

You're welcome, Vega! :)

[canoilers]

nice use of wording all poems don't have to rhyme.
I liked it. Maybe it could be a calling?

[Logan]

Just a stage I went through :p
All fine now :D

-Vega-

[Babee Shania]

Raul that was pretty sad :( but it was so nice!! :) wow you are VERY talented! :) good job buddy :D

[Logan]

Thanks Sam :)
I really doubt the talent part, but hey- thanks anyhoo :p

-Vega-

[SHANIANUTS!]

Is your last name Hungarian in origin?

[Logan]

Yup. It's 100% Hungarian ;)

-Vega-

[pearl]

It seems you were too sad when you write it:cry:

Pearl:)